应对托福写作,你需要一双善于发现美的眼睛

很多考托福的朋友总是在感叹,这个世界上能拿到的好作文实在是太少了,其实很多时候不是这些作文少,而是在于你没有努力去发掘这些作文。

发掘美,需要一颗洞察美的眼睛。

那么问题来了,当拿到一篇托福满分作文,我们该如何赏析、对待它呢?

应对托福写作,你需要一双善于发现美的眼睛

文章结构

要看一看这些作文的结构是怎么展开的。要仔细的读一下,这些作文每一段的写作目的,到底是支持还是反对,以及哪几段支持,哪几段反对。

段落结构

要仔细分析在一段之中,每一句话所起到的作用。到底是主题句,还是例证。

句型变化

要仔细想想这些作文每一句话说话的分式、分寸。先断句,然后找出从句,最后分析语法。分析,这么写妙在哪,好在哪?

应对托福写作,你需要一双善于发现美的眼睛

对比自己的写法

看每一句话的时候,脑中都要思考,这句话中文是什么意思,如果是我自己来写,我会怎么写!并且在下一篇自己的作文中替换为这些用法。

用词的准确性

一篇优秀的文章,除了结构、思路、句型,就是词汇了。托福考试,你再用老掉牙的词就显得你很没有水平。当然,这也不是要求你用偏僻的词,关键是要地道。奥巴马的演讲稿,都能看懂,但是它就是地道的美语,你就是写不出来。

适量背诵

天才,都是善于模仿的。

对于你觉得写得好的、你感兴趣的文章,把它背诵下来。尤其是对于临时抱佛脚的考生,更是如此。当你脑子存的货多了,你就可以在考场中信手拈来、随心挥洒。

我们都知道,NO pains, No gains.

应对托福写作,你需要一双善于发现美的眼睛

说了这么多,来看一篇范文:

Independent Writing:

Does modern technology help students learn more information and learn it more quickly?

Marvelous as it looks at first sight, modern technology does not help students learn information at a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases; or it could work towards the opposite direction which led students to lose their initiative to learn and explore.

First of all, one property of modern technology is latently harmful to any learning mind – it distracts. One thing we feel about when we are searching for information online is that the internet, as an outstanding example of modern technology and even regarded as the innovator of education, provides us with not only relevant results to make use of, but also external links to click. More than once I turned on my computer to check school library for resources, but ended up watching Youtube videos. In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information. We do acquire more information with the convenient tool, yet most of them are irrelevant and in the end procrastinating would lower our learning.

Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only we possess information more quickly rather than we learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database, however, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.

Furthermore, modern technology gives students an illusion that information and real knowledge is easy to learn – just by clicking mouse or watching videos. But in fact this forms only the first step towards useful information and effective learning, as learning of any kind requires full concentration and interactive thinking, which are almost absent in the pocess of popular e-learning experience.

To summarize, modern technology does not help students learn more information and learn it more quickly, though it does make access to information and resources much more easily. The popular e-learning still lacks the concentration, depth, and interaction that are the hallmark of traditional ways of educating and learning.

应对托福写作,你需要一双善于发现美的眼睛

少年,除了分析、背诵,你还有多写。熟能生巧,这句话千真万确,是绝对的真理。只有多写,你才知道自己的差距。

比如:

In this case, computer (定语)as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role (词组)in learning information.

这句话,我们自己很有可能写的就是:

In this case, computer that is a equipment of modern technology have a bad effect in learning information.

同样是定语、词组的运用,但是差距就十分明显了!

所以,同学们,加油了!

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